well, rewrote the WHOLE storyline...

[Judge_Spunky]

Originally posted by Kuza

"Mortal, you dare reap me of my fortunes?"

This lead me to believe that the dragon was immortal

Originally posted by Kuza
"It was nearing the time of death for the dragon as well."

This says otherwise.

Besides that little desceptancy, there's nothing wrong with it. I like it a lot, and it's very creative.
Though I didn't get to read the previous version, I think this version sounds quite refined.
Good work.