Emera Story-Line

[Emera]

Just starting to make the OSL for my server and was wondering if you guys can have a read of this and comment on what you think i can improve on or add. Thanks!

Prolouge-
Millions of years ago, a strange star fell from the heavens. A dark green emerald flew with speed that scatered light as far as the eye could see. It blitzed its way towards the center of the land they call Emera. The sky flew ablaze as it drilled it's way into the surface. As is gradually grinded to a halt, a dark green mist emerged from withing the impact crater, and it flew across the land. It is said, that on that very night, all the villagers within a hundered miles, had nightmares...

-Characters story
You grew up on a farm village on a hilltop with only you and your parents. You lived there for many years, not stopping to think once of the wonders beyond your farm gate. One day, as your father returned to his dutys as a guard at the castle, you hear of a thick green mist approaching the land. Your father never returned from his dutys at the castle. You wondered for many years what had happened to your poor father, until one day, your mother sat down with you at the dinner table, and told you everything. You sought revenge, the horror and the agony that filled your mind that day drove you to seek this green mist, and purge the land of emera of it...