need some help with guns

[bahamutstevetff]

i did these too, the top one i used another guys outline and changed it abit, but shaded it all myself. He dosent mind since you can barely even recognise it, so both are mine Dpent a bit more time for the bottom one, but now i want to do front veiws of the weapon( bottom) , but idk how to get an effective veiw, can anyone help me?

[Clockwork]

Not bad

I will however, provide strict critism >:O!

The lineart isn't bad, but work on the way you make corners or turns, round it out some and keep the curve moving without jagged edges. for example, instead of 1 pixel, then 2, then 1, try 2, then 1 then 1.... ._. if you get what I mean at all... XD

The colors look a little faded on the first one...
You don't have to post you're pallette with it ._.
Try not to group to much of your darkest color together, for example on the 1st gun, the black pixels that hold the scope up, or even the hilt of the gun where it comes to a sharp point o_O. Also try to keep a notisable difference between colors. I cant the alot of difference between your darkest green and the black on the 2nd gun. :o

[bahamutstevetff]

Originally Posted by Clockwork

Not bad

I will however, provide strict critism >:O!

The lineart isn't bad, but work on the way you make corners or turns, round it out some and keep the curve moving without jagged edges. for example, instead of 1 pixel, then 2, then 1, try 2, then 1 then 1.... ._. if you get what I mean at all... XD

The colors look a little faded on the first one...
You don't have to post you're pallette with it ._.
Try not to group to much of your darkest color together, for example on the 1st gun, the black pixels that hold the scope up, or even the hilt of the gun where it comes to a sharp point o_O. Also try to keep a notisable difference between colors. I cant the alot of difference between your darkest green and the black on the 2nd gun. :o

the first one was done in like 2 seconds, before i went on to the second which was more seriose.:P

theres no black on the second, all outlines are the darkest green on it, ill take into account the corner thing , thanks

[Dumdumdidi]

2nd one looks weird to me, like there is 2 light sources pointing at the gun.
First one looks seemingly better.

[xXziroXx]

Reminds me of my old one, http://forums.graalonline.com/forums...ad.php?t=76232

I sort of like the outline on your top one, but the coloring and shading on both seem quite awful to me.

[bahamutstevetff]

Originally Posted by xXziroXx

Reminds me of my old one, http://forums.graalonline.com/forums...ad.php?t=76232

I sort of like the outline on your top one, but the coloring and shading on both seem quite awful to me.

whats wrong with it, and how can i impove it?