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Originally posted by Kuza
"Mortal, you dare reap me of my fortunes?"
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This lead me to believe that the dragon was immortal
Quote:
Originally posted by Kuza
"It was nearing the time of death for the dragon as well."
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This says otherwise.
Besides that little desceptancy, there's nothing wrong with it. I like it a lot, and it's very creative.
Though I didn't get to read the previous version, I think this version sounds quite refined.
Good work.
