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Old 12-29-2011, 04:01 PM
Emera Emera is offline
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It's not BAD for your first song, but I'm going to point out some things that don't really go together properly in this tune.
  • Your melody is everywhere, and changes tempo randomly. It sounds confusing.
  • It sounds a little out of tune and notes sound like they're scattered everywhere.

Work on those first, and come back with what you've got. Like I say it's not a bad try for your first song, but can be improved. +rep for trying ^_^ I need to spread some reputation first!
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