[Hiro]

the storyline you have posted did not grab my attention for even a second. i think you should worry more about the gameplay of your server than the story-line.

if this is a linear-quest based server, then you need to post more information about the server and how it relates to the storyline because what you have posted now isn't something we can really comment on. green gems flying through the sky causing green-mist that causes nightmares that kills your father that years later your mother reveals the truth to you about? i mean come on...you make the player seem incredibly ignorant.

you have said that this will have a "classic-perspective" so can we assume the typical sword-style? if so, then i hope to god you don't try and make every quest into a "kill the baddies to move onto the next level where it's a bush maze!" type ****

basically, if you are trying to centralize this storyline as the pinnacle of your server to which everything revolves, then it really needs some work. if it isn't central, and is only there to explain the relevance of certain gameplay aspects, then you should go completely the otherway with this - make it as cliche as possible and completely disconnected from the actual purpose of the server (whatever that may end up being)