The colour variation on the parts are a bit bright compared to the base coloured.
Alot of pixel joint users, and myself, use 1 lighting colour, 1 base, 2 shadows, 1 line.
I think your colour of choice on the face really puts off the viewer. The placing of the detailing hatching is well placed, just too bright, or could do with a less bright colour to make it less...harsh?
Id recommend not using the same technique on the face and fur, as they are two different surfaces, and maybe the face area would be smoother and more round
Im trying hard to comment to help you, but i always look up to you :P
On the anchlers choose a light direction, and then remeber what shape they are, to decide the were about of the lights. If you read up, use the colours i recommended you to use, so it doesnt become over detailed.
Also, what's your pixeljoint username ^_^
Hope that lot helps a bit.