
10-14-2005, 07:13 AM
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Magnificent Bastard
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Join Date: Dec 2004
Location: Bermuda Triangle
Posts: 6,790
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Uhmn... The story tends to flow really quickly. More details (Especially ones that are symbolic of things.) would probably help with enchancing it more, though I don't know what type of meaning you'd pull out of a story based on a game. Perhaps I am expecting too much from all the English classes I've taken. Who knows. |
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