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gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 07:30 PM

Need Feedback
 
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Alright, I'm working on a sword, and I'm not sure what I should change/improve, so if you have any advice/compliments/criticism post it here please. Thanks.

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Soala 02-06-2011 07:35 PM

It's rather dark and could use a brighter palette, it needs more colors! :)

codecub 02-06-2011 07:44 PM

dragon longsword

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 07:55 PM

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Originally Posted by Soala (Post 1628576)
It's rather dark and could use a brighter palette, it needs more colors! :)

I wanted it to be dark, but I do agree it needs more colors, the black part is solid black, no shading.

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Originally Posted by codecub (Post 1628583)
dragon longsword

Thats actually where I got the idea for it.

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 08:08 PM

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Tweaked the sword a little, added mini spikes on the hilt, and started shading the black part of the blade.

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Soala 02-06-2011 08:32 PM

The blade is rather small so it's kinda hard to detail something on it
Here's a quick edit showing what you could change. I didn't touch the blade outline, but edited the handle some:
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Next, it probably needs more work on the outline, handle and blade design.

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 09:07 PM

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I like what you did with the blade, is it alright if I use that?

Also, I tried to imitate the hilt spikes you had where it was a little vertical, I'm pleased with that result, I'm still looking to see what it would need to improve, but so far I like it, thanks for the help, Ill rep you whenever I get enough rep to rep positive.

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fowlplay4 02-06-2011 09:40 PM

but can you create the diagnoal and still make it look good?

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 09:55 PM

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Originally Posted by fowlplay4 (Post 1628680)
but can you create the diagnoal and still make it look good?

Thats my challenge so far.

Another version I made, made the colors darker while keeping the same shape.
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Transition in ascending order from what I have, what looks the best?
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Fulg0reSama 02-06-2011 10:06 PM

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Originally Posted by gwFCCtennis (Post 1628694)
Thats my challenge so far.

Another version I made, made the colors darker while keeping the same shape.
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If I scratch it, will the paper come off and reveal the chocolate that's under it?

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 10:08 PM

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Originally Posted by Fulg0reSama (Post 1628697)
If I scratch it, will the paper come off and reveal the chocolate that's under it?

Dumb that one down for me please.

Soala 02-06-2011 10:09 PM

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Originally Posted by gwFCCtennis (Post 1628655)
I like what you did with the blade, is it alright if I use that?

Of course you can :)

Fulg0reSama 02-06-2011 10:10 PM

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Originally Posted by gwFCCtennis (Post 1628699)
Dumb that one down for me please.

I dislike the shading, it looks like it's been wrapped in tin foil.

http://nicholeheady.typepad.com/capt...20607_kiss.jpg

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 10:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Fulg0reSama (Post 1628702)
I dislike the shading, it looks like it's been wrapped in tin foil.

http://nicholeheady.typepad.com/capt...20607_kiss.jpg

Ah. I wanted to see if I could make it look better if I made it darker to give it a more evilish type look, but I ended up with a Candy Blade. Hmm. Ill keep messing with the sword until I get a better result.

Fulg0reSama 02-06-2011 10:13 PM

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Originally Posted by gwFCCtennis (Post 1628703)
Ah. I wanted to see if I could make it look better if I made it darker to give it a more evilish type look, but I ended up with a Candy Blade. Hmm. Ill keep messing with the sword until I get a better result.

Your shading color wise makes me think it is a poor attempt at stone, I say move away from it and better use of contrast, probably near flat color instead of making a gradient like you did there.

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 10:17 PM

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Originally Posted by Fulg0reSama (Post 1628704)
Your shading color wise makes me think it is a poor attempt at stone, I say move away from it and better use of contrast, probably near flat color instead of making a gradient like you did there.

Any of these what you think would look good (obviously not 4)? If not, I'll redo the hilt with new colors, or just ditch the hilt all together and try a different design for it. The blade part I'm happy with and won't make very major changes to it.
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Fulg0reSama 02-06-2011 11:04 PM

Personally, I like none of them to the point of actually picking between any of them. 1st is too plain, second is just not enough, three seems best of the four out of the pick, four is fine as well but I just don't care for it. I kind of like the idea of just the stick, no side poky parts, make the blade the focus and let the hilt just be a bare basic hilt. (I know my terminology is just so advanced, I'm clearly a swords smith)

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 11:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Fulg0reSama (Post 1628734)
Personally, I like none of them to the point of actually picking between any of them. 1st is too plain, second is just not enough, three seems best of the four out of the pick, four is fine as well but I just don't care for it. I kind of like the idea of just the stick, no side poky parts, make the blade the focus and let the hilt just be a bare basic hilt. (I know my terminology is just so advanced, I'm clearly a swords smith)

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Think you can draw what you mean so I can use it as a reference?

Fulg0reSama 02-06-2011 11:35 PM

http://www.trocadero.com/101antiques...1/picture1.jpg

this may work. though dont make it such a knife.

gwFCCtennis 02-06-2011 11:50 PM

I'll work on it more tommorrow, for now I'm in Super Bowl mode.

Unkownsoldier 02-07-2011 03:31 AM

its a nice butter knife. Try making the blade and handle bigger xD

touch_me 02-08-2011 07:06 AM

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your Shading isn't terrible, the biggest part is your color pallet. I found it hard to use. I hope you don't mind but i redid your sword trying not to alter the shape as much as possible. All i did was change the hilt allot...the biggest challenge was like i said using the colors that you chose. Instead of using allot of colors that all kinda look the same try using as few colors as possible to practice (ill post an example). But the sword itself wasn't bad, you will get more creative with shapes with time.

Ill probably post my finished product of the remake when i have more time to play with those colors. Then again, i may not be the best person to take advice from.

MagikMasterMind 02-08-2011 07:55 PM

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Keep it simple, not throwing colours everywhere :o
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Few tips:
Colour selection, look my three attemps above. One is too light, the other too dark and the other's colors have a nice match and turned out nice

Shapes When making a weapon, make sure you use shapes instead of throwing colors everywhere

gwFCCtennis 02-09-2011 02:00 AM

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Alright, I like the advice, Its helping, however I'm stuck with the hilt design so I'll put that sword on hold for the time being. About to work on a sword that will be for a Wind Spirit type monster, heres the shape off the start, anything I should change before starting?

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Fulg0reSama 02-09-2011 02:30 AM

I don't know where or why but I had the goofy idea of editting your sword...

This is what I got.

http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/6...facedoodle.png

gwFCCtennis 02-09-2011 02:49 AM

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What I have so far. I like the wind effect, but I think I may need cooler colors. Obviously, nothing is finished yet. I'm just posting this so you have an idea of what I'm going towards, and not just a rough outline. The blade colors I don't like, but I'm focusing on the effect for now. I'm looking for ideas on colors/designs, don't give criticism on the sword blade colors yet, as it's pretty much placeholder colors (feel free to suggest colors however), but I do want design criticism and wind design criticism.

The wind design is also in progress.
Keep in mind this is a very rough draft, and nowhere near perfect/completed. I'm only posting it because I want you guys to get the feel/idea for it, and not just a blank black skeleton of a blade design, and also it's my stopping point for today.
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Fulg0reSama 02-09-2011 02:50 AM

http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/6...facedoodle.png
Sillyface approves of this, But if you could make an animation of it that would be superb

gwFCCtennis 02-09-2011 03:05 AM

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Originally Posted by Fulg0reSama (Post 1629278)
http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/6...facedoodle.png
Sillyface approves of this, But if you could make an animation of it that would be superb

I was thinking of that, but I've never animated before. I'll give it a try later. Even though I called it quits for tonight on the blade, I do think I may attempt at messing around with .gif animation to get the feel for it.

gwFCCtennis 02-09-2011 03:37 AM

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Done for tonight. Still working on animation. Still need to finish wind effect. Still need to improve colors. Still need to improve design. Comments/criticism/ideas/etc. please.

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DemonSpawnn 02-09-2011 04:07 AM

Needs wayyyy more contrast on the blade.

codecub 02-09-2011 04:36 AM

good gfx i don't know why people have to criticize everything they see

anubis_wing 02-09-2011 05:58 AM

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Originally Posted by codecub (Post 1629298)
good gfx i don't know why people have to criticize everything they see

the irony is it's called "Need Feedback" i.e. Critisism.

Arch_Angel 02-09-2011 03:19 PM

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Originally Posted by DemonSpawnn (Post 1629296)
Needs wayyyy more contrast on the blade.

o.O

Its already almost contrasted to the max. eh? It needs more shades of colors to shape it in my opinion..

Fulg0reSama 02-09-2011 03:21 PM

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Originally Posted by codecub (Post 1629298)
good gfx i don't know why people have to criticize everything they see

trolololol

Constructive Criticism is a form of giving feedback, brah.

Elk 02-09-2011 03:25 PM

You should animate, maybe this helps...
Made this for Zodiac 1 year ago, but ended up being unused

http://img687.imageshack.us/img687/3419/swarclaive.gif

RegretZ 02-09-2011 03:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Elk (Post 1629403)
You should animate, maybe this helps...
Made this for Zodiac 1 year ago, but ended up being unused

http://img687.imageshack.us/img687/3419/swarclaive.gif

They seriously didn't use that?
That's amazing.

Chaotic, you're pretty good though, probably just need to work on the metal shading a bit imo.

gwFCCtennis 02-19-2011 06:34 PM

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What Im working on now. Need major help on the hilt, probably going to ditch both hilts and start over on the hilt, and I need feedback on the blade. Its supposed to be a angelic sword or something along those lines.
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Elk 02-20-2011 12:57 PM

What about the animated sword

gwFCCtennis 02-20-2011 05:31 PM

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Originally Posted by Elk (Post 1632079)
What about the animated sword

I finished all the views of it, but don't know how to actually animate it (I use Paint.net)

gwFCCtennis 02-20-2011 07:52 PM

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Experiment with animation. Used makeagif.com to make it. I like it. Supposed to be light coming off of sunglasses like rockstar style stuff.
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